We displayed our 1st cut of our music video and we were given feedback by our teacher of both the positives and negatives of our production and it was as follows:
Holding Shot Steady
-First zoom out shot on Ashley - re do without the camera jerk, or use montage to cover the unsteady look.
Framing a Shot
-Good shot to open with (close up of Ash)
Appropriate Material
-Use beat at start of the video to link to suitable visual.
-Corridor shot - emphasise that it is strange - use empty corridor twice
-Improve sots by hedge.
-Approaching pump house, interesting - develop this further.
-Ashley's house boring - change.
-Add shot (school) to blank sheet of paper (dinner table shot) - reference to the "streets" video.
Selecting Mise en Scene
-Good noir shadow as Ashley leaves bed.
-Pictures are good ideas, but don't come across them.
-Last shot - good however, perhaps cover Ash with the sheet.
Editing for Meaning
-Start the music after captions.
-Stress the drama of the eyes opening - sound effect beep.
-Sitting down at the table scene - cut out the empty chair part.
-Good transition to school corridor.
-Good effect - paring action with beat in music.
Varied Shot Transitions, Caption and Other FX
-Use reverse effect - Ash moving in one direction, other people moving backwards?
-Leaves falling upwards?
Use of Sound with Images/Editing
-Some good ideas
Overall Comment
-"Good overall idea, but some shots lack impact - go for more strangeness/ weirdness, build up uncertainty in viewers - can they trust what they are feeling? Colour in last shot is good, use spot colour at other points".
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